Please help me critique a fellow soldiers resume

SuperLT09

Hey Guys,

I'm going to attach a couple of resumes that two of my Soldiers wanted me to look over. I'm not the best at this so I decided that I should come to the best for help. They're both great kids and they really deserve better opportunities in the civilian world. Thank you!

Mitechniq

Couple of quick observations:

First please do not post real names on this forum.

Is she currently in the Army, 2 of her job positions say Date - Present?

I have several resumes depending on who and how it is being distributed, a long one for career sites, a short one when I send it to a company and a military one. My military one is for DOD Contractors/ GS Jobs who understand military jargon and care for a clearance.

I would remove the specialist and use administrator. I personally do not like miscellaneous in a resume, either remove that line or change it to something more specific. I also tell my Airmen to look at their evaluations for accomplishments that can be added which normally include some budgetary number.

High School Diploma is not necessary and I would look at Word Resume Examples to make the resume look cleaner.

SuperLT09

Mitechniq,

I apologize for the name dropping. She is actually a reservist who's looking to break into the networking field on the private sector. Thank you for the comments.

No_Nerd

What is her MOS? Sorry man but the formatting and wording on that resume a no go. Give me an email to send you my resume to it might help .

routergods

Security clearance is buried under education... put that near or at the top of the resume.