Resume Critique

Any pointers? I feel like the summary is a weird read but I'm not sure how to fix it.

Currently seeking a new sysadmin role.

Thank you in advance.

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TechZilla

After posting I realized that my education/certs were not added. They are listed after the summary with the same format as the rest.

Krones

You could always take the summary out and talk about your skills and experience if you write a cover letter for a specific position. You always want to be careful with adverbs that end with the letters ly. Thrive to effectively... I know you are talking about IT but to make that claim to optimize all technologies is pretty broad and can look bad to an interviewer even if your intention is good. Are you a Linux expert? How about a DBA? Can you thrive to effectively configure all NoSQL technologies? If you keep the summary, it needs to be rewritten. My suggestion is to read some other summaries and come up with a few different ones.

Write and rewrite the more meaningful responsibilities 2-3 times and read them aloud. Come back later with fresh eyes and see which one fits the best. For example, instead of resolved a history of problematic users by improving IT control over workstations, I might put something similar too:

Responsible for implementing security measures via group policies to contain vulnerabilities and streamline user and computer management.

TechZilla

Is it okay to talk in the first person in the summary?

Ex: I thrive to.... I am quick to grasp....

Or should they be more like statements?

Jalharad

Mine is quite a bit different. I wrote a simple objective: Obtain a permanent position in Information Technology based off my education and experience.

As for a summary, i just listed all the technologies or software that I have touched in my technical degrees or work experience. No fluff, just listed them
like this:
Ø Windows 7, Vista, XP
Ø Windows Server 2008, 2008 R2
Ø Fedora 14 and 15

What you listed for your work experience is very similar to mine, but you need to add numbers. "Provide client support for 165+ employees"

My resume was created with help from a technical recruiter with more then 15 years experience recruiting IT personnel.

Each recruiter is different. Each area you live in will have different standards.

Oh, and throw out the idea that your resume has to be 1 page. Mine is 3 and moving more and more towards becoming a full Curriculum Vitae (CV).
Most HR departments and recruiters will run your resume through a search algorithm to find key words, so having more information is not bad, so long as it is not fluff. The intention of adding numbers to the work experience gives a reference to how much you have supported and how often, and it makes it more interesting to the manager who will eventually read it.

Also, unless you live in the area of the jobs you are applying (Greater metro Seattle, or similar) leave out your address. Always leave out your date of birth, and only list your High School diploma if it is your highest education, otherwise leave it off. List all of your highest level degrees and those one step below. (if you have a masters degree, they really don't care if you graduated with an AA from bumpkin community college) The only exception to this rule is if you went to an Ivy league school for your BA, but not your masters or doctoral degrees.

TechZilla

What do you think of this summary?

Motivated IT Professional with over 3 years experience administering Windows servers and clients in a fast paced environment. Thrive to streamline IT infrastructure using the latest technologies to create a stable and efficient environment. Ability to think creatively in order to solve a wide array of technical issues while providing exceptional customer support.

I want to somehow say that I am always working to learn something new but can't seem to word it right. Something like:

Dedicated to expanding knowledge and quick to grasp new concepts....but just doesn't come off right.