Resume feedback, TIA!

lsud00d

I've had the same resume format for around 5 or 6 years and I think it could use some spicing up. I've had compliments on it and some friends that have based their resumes off of it, but I would like feedback on several things:

Flow
Readability
Technical appeal
etc.

It's structured with an approach to sys/application admin'ing in the PAR format because that's what I mainly do, and I'm only hitting on the big/enterprise systems that I work with to conserve space.

Any and all comments are appreciated, thank y'all for taking your time to look over it!

TE_resume.pdf

lsud00d

I posted this kinda late last night so bumping for the morning crew

xXErebuS

It looks really good; one thing I noticed is you repeat some of the same information; in your profile you list that your microsoft certified then go on to list the certs....

In addition its hard to read; consider consolidating your information; remember the person receiving your information and even hiring you may not know jargon, acronyms, and vendors... Make it easier for them to understand what you do:

"Groundwork System Administrator; Multi-application monitoring wrapper (Open Source Nagios, Cacti/Weathermap, NeDi, and Ntop) to monitor state-wide application, server, and network infrastructure of over 800 devices with notifications triggered via customized Nagios scripts
 Squid System Administrator; Forward Proxy and web cache application with site cluster management via Novell’s OES services. Instituted Squid Cache Manager and Squid Squeezer applications for unified hot-site web management and metrics assessment of statewide proxy clusters performance"

Could be said a lot simplier i.e. Managed monitoring of core network and server infrastructure as well as proxy services for said company.


Also - you should use verbs instead of noun phrases in your bullets; dont say, "Stellent/Oracle UCM System Administrator; Content Management System for government policies...", instead say "Speerheaded Stellent/Oracle UCM Systems and Content Management...."

It's all opinion based but I have had the luck of having the ability to submit my resumes for review by professionals for free over the years and these are some of the points they bring to me.

One thing that I do that may or may not help you is limiting your Resume to one page; cut out any experience that is not related to the job that you are applying for. Its hard and it took me hours to cut mine but I strongly believe the easier a resume and more precise it is the more likely its going to get read completely and understood


EDIT: I would like to add.... don't change your format; you may need to tweak it after changes but it looks great

lsud00d

Thank you for the feedback xXErebus, that is a lot of good information! I've toyed with the idea of the simplification concept and I think I'll make an alternate version of my resume and then compare the two. Also I agree it is a good idea to tailor the resume to the job being applied for--I am not applying for jobs, perse, but have handed a few out to friends in other companies to keep in their manager's stack should something come up.

The rest is all good stuff as well, thank you for the ideas and positive feedback

lsud00d

Thanks again xXErebuS, I used your good points to reformat my resume and consolidate it to one page, I think it's a winner!

W Stewart

TIA is a precursor to a stroke.