Please review my resume. Thanks.

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All comments and suggestions are welcome.

Thank you.

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Akaricloud

I'm not trying to be harsh here, so please only take this as helpful criticism.

My first impression is that it's way too long and cluttered. From an outside perspective it looks like you've just thrown a bunch of keywords together that really don't have a place on a resume. When reading a resume I really don't care for details like the fact that you've used checksum, virtualbox, malwarebytes, ect. as anyone applying for this position could figure those out in half a second. On the other side, some of your skills are so broad that they have no meaning to me. What does it mean to list something like LAN as a skill?

I would suggest getting rid of the summary completely(although all of this could be used in a cover letter), combining your two skills sections(under summary and one titled skills), and otherwise trying to get this more readable.

I would also re-do your professional experience section. While achievements work for your network security position, for the others they really mean nothing. You can't expect any HR goon reviewing a resume to understand or care that you raised the HealthStream Database course completion rate. These need to be less specific and more aimed towards skills that the position you're applying for requires.

Mrock4

Not too bad, only a couple of comments. I only bring these up to assist you.

Your first paragraph states: "[FONT=Arial, sans-serif]Talented network and systems professional with a strong portfolio of experience in IT security and administration, currently seeking an entry-level position."

Your first line, you state that you are a talented network and systems professional with a strong portfolio of experience, but then the next part of that sentence, you state you're looking for an entry-level position. If I were a hiring manager, I would say "what's wrong here?" Just my $.02, but I'd alter that to say something like "currently seeking a position which challenges me technically, and also allows me to contribute to organizational goals"- this will say "I'm open to a challenge, and I want something difficult, but I'm not going to ditch you as soon as I paid my resume"

Next, just my $.02 again, but I would highlight your "education & training specialist" experience. Even though this wasn't strictly IT training, it shows you've got experiencing mentoring and teaching others..that is valuable in any field.

I would trim down the TRICARE experience. It's great to have and it really does look impressive, but if you are applying for an IT job, I would personally put the bare minimum (ie: cut 2-4 bullets off of it, leaving the most impressive/substantial ones)

Something I've done on all my resumes that REALLY has helped me, is I always list one cert as "in progress". For example:

Certifications
-CCNA
-CCDA
-CC...
-CWNA (in-progress)

To me, this shows that you're still advancing technically (outside of your degree), and you're open to learning new things.

Just my $.02 for whatever it's all worth.[/FONT]

Success101

Akaricloud wrote: »

I'm not trying to be harsh here, so please only take this as helpful criticism.

My first impression is that it's way too long and cluttered. From an outside perspective it looks like you've just thrown a bunch of keywords together that really don't have a place on a resume. When reading a resume I really don't care for details like the fact that you've used checksum, virtualbox, malwarebytes, ect. as anyone applying for this position could figure those out in half a second. On the other side, some of your skills are so broad that they have no meaning to me. What does it mean to list something like LAN as a skill?

I would suggest getting rid of the summary completely(although all of this could be used in a cover letter), combining your two skills sections(under summary and one titled skills), and otherwise trying to get this more readable.

I would also re-do your professional experience section. While achievements work for your network security position, for the others they really mean nothing. You can't expect any HR goon reviewing a resume to understand or care that you raised the HealthStream Database course completion rate. These need to be less specific and more aimed towards skills that the position you're applying for requires.

You're not being harsh. I have thick skin. Keep it coming. Anything else?

Success101

Bump...

Cerebro

Seems too cluttered. Having bullet points, instead of one large paragraph would help. This would get the person in HR to read your resume and not skip over it.

HTH