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Whistlestop
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Greetings to you all, I think I maybe in need of a CV overhaul so please take a look at my website Richard Coleman's homepage - Home
My CV is available here along with other information about my past.
Thank you.
My CV is available here along with other information about my past.
Thank you.
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nearly 50 views and nobody has anything positive or negative to say about my CV? I will copy and paste my CV below if you're scared to visit my site General Name & firstname: Coleman, Richard City & Country: SE London, UK Nationality: British Married: Yes Driving licence: Full UK Phone +44-7790-551-301 Email racoleman@cix.co.uk uk.linkedin.com/pub/richard-coleman/0/603/138 Languages English native Dutch moderate Security ckearance SC until 2011 (held by EDS) now expired CSCS 5 years from August 2014 Certification scheme for building site safety CRB 1 year from May 2015 Richard Coleman Personality/ roles I work as a specialist 2nd line desktop support individual. I am extremely knowledgeable in this area, with some limited low-level experience of server & Exchange (mainly due to being constrained by large & government-orientated organization strictly to that role). I have a lot of 1st line experience in AD (Active Directory); have done some 1st line work (mainly as an adjunct to my 2nd); some low level experience of project work; 3 years of team leading/ managerial. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I am extremely versatile with a very wide range of interests. This expresses itself both in my personal & professional life. I am very flexible and, combined with an ability to pick things up quickly, has meant that I can adapt to new situations quickly, both in the UK & abroad (I have worked for over 8 years in The Netherlands , US, Belgium, Germany). I love learning about new technology and is applies this to my work. I enjoy sharing my knowledge with others & spend some of my work time training others. In the past I have acted as a team leader, supervisor, manager, having done this for some 3 years in total. am comfortable as both a team player & working alone. My past employers have appreciated my independence and responsibility. I had UK high level Ministry of Defence security clearance (SC expired 2011). I now have an enhanced CRB. Function 2nd line desktop support – 1st line server support - helpdesk - low level project management - team leading Keywords which characterise Richard Coleman
- Analytical - problem solver
- Gets on well with people
- Good sense of humour
- Good communicator
- Extremely flexible
- Disciplined
- An initiator
- Quick to pick things up
- Eager to learn
- Pragmatic
- Documents everything
- 12 months in the US as network supervisor (1984/5)
- 2. 4 months network manager for ESA in Darmstadt, Germany
- 6 months as network manager for Memorex, 1987
- 2 months site manager, ACT 1991
- 4 months team supervisor, DERA 1998/9
- 4 months Project team leader, DHL, late 2007
- 2 months Team lead, Rolls-Royce, 2008
- 4 months Service desk supervisor SwissPost 2011
- 4 months helpdesk supervisor, Purple Matrix
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scaredoftests
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Way too busy (I mean the format). It seems like one run on sentence. Take out personality/Take out the boxes (who cares if you are married or have a driver's license?). Separate your experience with actual jobs. Move education at the end and take out 'type of education' /Take out Dutch language. That is what stands out to me right now.Never let your fear decide your fate.... -
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I agree with scaredoftests, I think there's too much unnecessary information.
I don't think you need to list how many years of experience next to each skill.
Also take out certifications you don't have and if your SC has expired there's no point having it on your CV.
In the UK, I think most people state they have a drivers license and if you have no penalty points, add /Clean. -
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volfkhat
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scaredoftests wrote: »Way too busy (I mean the format). It seems like one run on sentence. Take out personality/Take out the boxes (who cares if you are married or have a driver's license?). Separate your experience with actual jobs. Move education at the end and take out 'type of education' /Take out Dutch language. That is what stands out to me right now.
Resumes are ART.
It all comes down to personal preference.
(I suspect that Local Region/culture plays a role in what's preferred)
Drivers License; maybe that is it relevant.
Dutch language; maybe that is relevant too.
With that being said, i agree with scaredy.
I see Too many words. Too much blah blah. Everything just runs on & on & on.
Is this a Resume, or a Job Application?
My brain hurts, and ive decided that i dont want to read anymore.
(NOT the response you want to invoke)
What exactly is your goal here?
If you are simply trying to document every single thing you've ever done....
then SUCCESS!
But if you are trying to land a job in 2017... then you need a rewrite.
First, identify what kind of position you are trying to land.
Then, cut your resume down to 2-pages; that will force you to include ONLY whats relevant.
Carefully add to it from there.
One last thing,
Netware 4 Life!!
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I helped do a lot of resume reviews for fellow classmates in college and many friends, but I'm not sure if I can really offer any advice here since you live in the UK. Here in the US, our standards are probably a lot different.
If this is the type of format that is common in the UK, then I think it looks fine. You could and should probably condense some of the content though as I don't know any HR people who would want to read so much.
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The part after JOB EXPERIENCE is so long, I doubt anyone is going to read through all that.Title: Sr. Systems Designer
Degree: B.S. in Computing Science, emphasis Information Assurance
Certifications: CISSP, PSP, Network+, Security+, CySA+, OSWP -
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MontagueVandervort
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I have a bit of experience in resume reviews and fixes, but I didn't touch this because it was UK. I apparently also didn't scroll down the other day when I first looked at this.
Irregardless of the culture, I can't imagine anyone would be able to read that huge block of text without some spacing. Get some spacing in there! -
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TechGromit
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Too busy, too much info.
Driving licence? Is that spelled right, same with Security ckearance? Nationality: British, Don't care, only interested if your authorized to work in the country, if applying overseas. Married: Yes Again Don't care, remove it.Richard Coleman Personality... etc, Don't care, remove entire personality assessment, You could put in a line line objective, something like I'm motivated, team player, effective communicate, etc.
Hobbies Cycling, SF, cooking, cricket, jazz, music in general, ten-pin, computers, houseplants, dogs Don't care about your hobbies, you could mention some of the most popular ones during an interview, and if the interviewer say Yea I like that too, you might be able to hit it off, but I definitely wouldn't put down one of my hobbies is houseplants.
Achievements Not Related to Work: Ran jazz club for 3 years Published conservation magazine for 4 years Site rep for allotment & had it converted to organic only Created organic orchard on allotment Started computer cooperative Presently organizing residents' association
Don't care, they have nothing to do with anything business related. You could mention you ran your own business and published a magazine for 4 years, try to make it sound business related.
Professional education Kind of education Level CERTIFICATE
Dutch language Studying at present
MCDST Studying at present
ITIL Studying at present
Novell 3.1 CNE Course successfully completed
Leave out crap you studying, you could mention that you speak a little Dutch, leave out courses completed, if you don't have a certification, then I assume you slept though class completed or not.
Diploma in Socio-Legal Studies Part-time college Diplomas 1982
UK ‘O’ level passes in English language, English literature, technical drawing, geography, mathematics, chemistry, statistics General 1968
Not even sure what this crap is, if you have a high school or technical school diploma, you could mention the school and year graduated, really don't care what course you took, leave them off your resume.
Kind Description
Hardware Dell, Compaq, IBM, HP, Fujitsu (all of these for laptops, PCs & printers)
Network systems Novell 3.1 & 4 – TCP/IP
Mainframe support IBM CICS, VTAM (not since 1990)
I've have experience on Mainframe support IBM CICS, VTAM, networking and PC's. Don't mention 1990, one computer is pretty much like another computer, so leave out IBM, HP, Dell, etc.
Hardware engineer: Data comms: Microsoft PC/ desktop support: MacBook Server support: IMAC/ installation/ floor walking: Server admin: Exchange admin Helpdesk: Supervision: Project management: Mainframe support: Windows (NT, 98, 2000, XP, 7, 10) Office suites: All Microsoft (97, 2000, 2003, 2010); Openoffice 6 years 8 years 17 years 6 months 8 years 23 years 4 years 4 years 15 years 2 years 2 years 8 years 17 years 17 years 1st line 3rd line 3rd line 1st line 1st line 3rd line 1st line 1st line 1st line 2nd line 2nd line 2ndline
Add this to the:
I've have experience on Mainframe support IBM CICS, VTAM, networking, Apple and PC's. Proficient in Microsoft windows, Office, exchange. Worked as Datacomm engineer, so I'm proficient in troubleshooting all forms for data communications.
That the hell is 6 years 8 years 17 years and 1st line 3rd line 3rd line 1st line ? Get rid of it.
Management experience For your information a brief overview of my managerial/ supervisory experience 1.12 months in the US as network supervisor (1984/5)
2.2. 4 months network manager for ESA in Darmstadt, Germany
1.6 months as network manager for Memorex, 1987
1.2 months site manager, ACT 1991
2.4 months team supervisor, DERA 1998/9
3.4 months Project team leader, DHL, late 2007
1.2 months Team lead, Rolls-Royce, 2008
1.4 months Service desk supervisor SwissPost 2011
2.4 months helpdesk supervisor, Purple Matrix
Total of 40 months over the years
Trash all this, This can be summed up in one line.
I have several years experience managing others.
JOB EXPERIENCE
Many of my roles have been on defence sites, so I am legally constrained by the UK Official Secrets Act as to what I am allowed to say. I have a CRB from March 2016. February 2016 – present Newham college Permanent senior desktop support at Newham college I am working as senior desktop support for Capita at Newham college in a team (9 personnel) who support more than 12,000 students and 900 staff.We look after 3,000 desktops and laptops, server management, cabling and network. The college's main site is in East Ham, with a further site in Stratford, and six further local neighbourhood learning centres. This is a permanent role. My function is 2nd line support for Windows, general fault finding, some low level support (hardware fixes, telephony, projectors, networks, Interactive whiteboards, servers, printers, tablets). The site is 99.9% Windows 7, a little W10 & I have picked up some moderate Macbook skills.We use LanDesk, Remedy, AD & cable testers. I do the bulk of supervising of work experience students. Although I spend 85% of my time at East Ham college, I'm also seconded to Stratford a couple of times a month to cover sickness or leave, as well as occasional visits to a few other sites for fault resolution. November-December 2015 Various shop installs Installation, rollout of ...
If I read this far into your resume, I would be slitting my wrist right about now. WAY too much info.
Company name, Job Title, employment dates, two or three lines description of job functions. Leave off everything else. **** ton of misspellings, maybe UK English is different than American English, but is defence suppose to be defense? There should be zero spelling errors on your resume.
Puple Matrix, Helpdesk Supervisor,
October 2014 - February 2015, Puple Matrix Helpdesk supervisor
Responsible for managing 8 engineers providing a wide range of IT services to various schools in the London area. Which included installing, upgrading and servicing servers, network support, access points, Anti-virus and patching.
You can embellish on this a little, but 3 sentences at the most. There a Purple Matrix Ltd, in London, are you sure you even spelled the company name correctly?
My recommendation is to use a resume writing service, you haven't clue what your doing.
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Techgromit, didn't you know that British and Americans spell certain words differently. Let me educate you
colour (British) versus color (your colonial and barbaric way of spelling it. Just kidding of course!)
Licence (British spelling) versus License (American)
Defence (British) versus defense
I'm amazed that you don't know this. I probably know more about your country than you do. If you look far back enough you will realize that the first British Puritan settlers arrived in the likes of Boston sometime in the early 1600s. I'm sure you have heard of the "Mayflower" which left Southampton Docks (England) and took the passengers first to Holland and then onto America. Shortly after this Jamestown (Virginia) was created. Named of course after James I
Ever heard of the first thanksgiving? This is what led to your bloody war with the native population or at least that is what history records.
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No, I didn't know the British spelled differently. And thanks for the history lesson, perhaps you have a future as a history teacher. As for your resume it's a complete disaster, I highly recommend you get a resume writing service to write it for you.Still searching for the corner in a round room.
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Whistlestop wrote: »If you look far back enough you will realize that the first British Puritan settlers arrived in the likes of Boston sometime in the early 1600s. I'm sure you have heard of the "Mayflower" which left Southampton Docks (England) and took the passengers first to Holland and then onto America. Shortly after this Jamestown (Virginia) was created. Named of course after James I
Ever heard of the first thanksgiving? This is what led to your bloody war with the native population or at least that is what history records.
You do know that prior to the revolution, you had 13 colonies?
The Mayflower was full of illegals. They were rapists and criminals!! And some, I assume, were good people.
lol
just kidding :]
(Besides... we all know that it was the Santa MArina, Nina, and Pinta with all the original rapists & criminals.)
ha! No arguments there :]Whistlestop wrote: »I'm amazed that you don't know this. I probably know more about your country than you do. -
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MrXpert
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TechGromit wrote: »No, I didn't know the British spelled differently. And thanks for the history lesson, perhaps you have a future as a history teacher. As for your resume it's a complete disaster, I highly recommend you get a resume writing service to write it for you.
Judging by racoleman's website although he has not been a History teacher he has managed to be a policeman and deepsea diver. I've never read such a colourfully created website until now. I would suggest to the OP that he remove the picture from the website and delete the information about his work history from the 1980s including his antiquated certifications which might give any future employer the wrong end of the stick. Just my opinion but it is currently working for you then carry on with itI'm an Xpert at nothing apart from remembering useless information that nobody else cares about. -
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Iristheangel
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What did I just read? *Blink*
One BIG recommendation is sticking to facts, not personality or warm fuzzies. Or as our good friend Joe Friday says:
The good news is that this can be cleaned up a lot but the bad news is there is a lot to clean up.
Also, I wouldn't recommend giving a history lesson to people that have good intentions and are just trying to help. Techgromit might not have known about the spelling differences but he doesn't live in the UK and his comments weren't out of any ill will. He might have some good advice for you but if it were me, I wouldn't want to give it after that reaction.
My 2 cents at least.
Check out enhancv.com. I've been playing around with that service lately for cleaning up friend's resumes. Like one poster said: it's an art. I like the templates they have there
