Resume Critique

Hey everyone,

Polishing up the resume for some positions I'm interested in and would like some feedback. I attached two because I can't decide where I want the skills area. I initially thought the bottom so that my degree and my experience (my main assets at the moment) would be noticed first. I don't like too much white space, or overcrowding, but sometimes I miss that sweet spot. I also sometimes go bullet-crazy. I go for simple and to the point, nothing fancy. I'm in my first IT role now and it's tough trying to convey everything in a few short sentences.

Please and thank you!

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EANx

Too many bullets, not enough complete sentences (as in, 0). And it's pretty rare that it's appropriate to use punctuation with bullets, get rid of the periods with yours.

bjpeter

EANx wrote: »

Too many bullets, not enough complete sentences (as in, 0). And it's pretty rare that it's appropriate to use punctuation with bullets, get rid of the periods with yours.

I agree. Put the phrases in one paragraph under each job title.

LionelTeo

A summary is ideal for the employer who had to gone through tons of resume everday. As you got to consider that the person screening the resume probably only have about 5-10 seconds for each resume and wont go into the job decription details.

e.g
<insert> professional with a total of x years specializing in <insert>

Neil86

Sorry for the delayed response. I appreciate the feedback. I did some research and went back at it. I was getting too caught up in the 1-page limitation and poor choice of format. Seems those trends have begun to fade. I have changed my resume and would like some additional feedback.

Thank you.

TE-Copy.pdf

yoba222

I don't do much hiring so I don't see very many resumes at work and most are on this forum, so my opinion is less experienced feedback and more of the armchair variety. That said, I can't remember ever seeing a hobbies/personal activities section before. Yet, I like the way you did it. Smooth way to claim CCNA in progress without sounding like you are superficially fluffing your creds. Armchair salute.

scaredoftests

Move skills to the bottom of the resume and get rid of Activities. Get rid of the fluff in regard to your education, just the facts.

Ashenwelt

I actually really like your activity section.

I would remove References are available upon request. And use the space for experience. I would also break up Windows OS and Office. Maybe declare what type of Windows OS?

Very nice. Key here is: I would read it as a hiring manager.

Neil86

Thanks everyone. I never did a section in the past like activities. I'm still on the fence about it. But as said, it works to throw in my Cisco studies, and I've struggled a little trying to find ways to include it and make it seem significant. But I also think it's somewhat silly/useless.

I'll make some changes and compare them. Great feedback.

LionelTeo

TBH just follow whats mentioned in this video XD. There is a lot to work on, even i have to reconsider my own.
https://youtu.be/UP-S9rvAYYo