Review my resume?

pLuhhmm

Had to crop it 3 times in paint so bare with me.

rubberToe

Look over the thread with resume recommendations.


From top down.

Remove objective.

maybe add a qualifications section such as 'summary of skills'
Make bulleted statements regarding your skills anything learned in school, IE Posses knowledge of network installation and administration.

Within work experience list the specific activities and skills used/performed. IE Performed hardware / software troubleshooting installation etc.

erase the skills section and make something to present the different technologies you have worked with, in an interview they will get more in depth on how experienced you are with these.

example: (unable to format better but you can get an idea)

TECHNICAL EXPERTISE
Systems Microsoft Windows (2000, XP, Vista); Linux
Software Microsoft: Office, Active Directory, Visio, Project, Access; Oracle; SQL*Plus
Languages Java, C, Bash Shell Scripting, SQL, PL/SQL, HTML/XHTML, PHP, Perl, Java Script

remove the high school reference and associate the certifications under said section directly below education or included as bulleted points under GASC

GT-Rob

yeah the skills section is an eye-sore, you will need to do something about that.

Also I would highlight your MCP more, it seems to be hidden away there.


Otherwise its not bad, and much better than a lot of entry level IT resumes I have come across

pLuhhmm

Okay thanks, Ill use this professional resume maker I just got and see what its about.

rubberToe

You don't need a to pay. It's better to know your resume well by doing it yourself. Do some research on the web, have a look at some templates. Check out mine.

Look at a few templates and take bits and pieces to make a custom one or modify the others to suit your needs. Make sure it flows and doesn't look frankensteinish. Do up an unformated one for monster and careerbuilder because those sites will garble most formatting. Use the formated ones for interviews, career fairs, and craigslist.

Templates:
http://office.microsoft.com/en-us/templates/CT101043371033.aspx


My resume, not perfect but sufficient.

Gundamtdk

Change the chronological order of your education starting from newest to the oldest.

When I first read the resume I thought you only had high school education.

LarryDaMan

I'm not a big fan of listing or reading GPAs in a resume. Nobody cares about your 4.0 or 2.0 or whatever, a degree is a degree. You wouldn't list certification scores would you? Just my opinion.

jryantech

LarryDaMan wrote:

I'm not a big fan of listing or reading GPAs in a resume. Nobody cares about your 4.0 or 2.0 or whatever, a degree is a degree. You wouldn't list certification scores would you? Just my opinion.

lol are you serious?

If you have a 3.0 or above please put it on your resume. It shows you put effort in your classes.

Yes a degree is a degree but someone who got a 4.0 obviously knows more then someone who got a 2.0, lets be serious here.

Comparing Certifications and Degrees is like Apples and Oranges.

As for the resume the skills section is ridiculous.
Only list the skill names you have, let the interviewer ask you how much you know about said "skill".

For example:

Operating Systems: Vista, XP and Linux
Computer Languages: HTML and C++
Other: Understanding of Malware Removal and Network Configuring


Don't list English as a Language you know, if your applying for a position in the United States of America...

networker050184

I agree with LarryDaMan on the GPA deal, better to leave it off.

The skills section looks like one of those emails recruiters send you to fill out and return! Definitely work on that.

The work experience section needs a lot of work also. No specific suggestion, but I would throw the whole thing out and start over.

Also like others have stated get rid of the objective (if someone reading your resume doesn't know you want a job then I feel sorry for them) and add a summary.

You could combine Languages with additional information, but I would leave it all of that off if I were you (unless specifically applying for a position that requires other languages). Just combine the certs with the education section and it will clean the whole resume up a little I think.

LarryDaMan

jryantech wrote:

LarryDaMan wrote:

I'm not a big fan of listing or reading GPAs in a resume. Nobody cares about your 4.0 or 2.0 or whatever, a degree is a degree. You wouldn't list certification scores would you? Just my opinion.

lol are you serious?

If you have a 3.0 or above please put it on your resume. It shows you put effort in your classes.

Yes a degree is a degree but someone who got a 4.0 obviously knows more then someone who got a 2.0, lets be serious here.

Comparing Certifications and Degrees is like Apples and Oranges.

Yes, I was serious. My degree included such relevant courses such as Physical Science, Literary Research, and U.S History 1812 - Present. How would my GPA (it was good) really be relevant?

I say again, nobody cares about your GPA. Have you been involved in the hiring process much?

It is personal opinion, and it probably won't hurt you. But, if you need to feel good about being an A+ student, I say get one of those "My kid was an honor roll student" bumper stickers for your mom's car.

pLuhhmm

Okay updated

undomiel

A skills based format would definitely be best to start off with. This new incarnation is definitely a step towards that and is looking a lot more professional. So I would move the focus to being on skills. Put your employment history down at the very bottom and expand on your skills more. Remove the lines about scheduling and team working. They don't look good on a resume as they feel like filler. Get in more of what you have actually worked with. Malware removal is good, what have you used to remove it? Have you set up virus and malware protection and if so what suites have you used for this? You've worked on Macs so specify if it is OS 9 or OS X. Recruiters will be scanning for keywords like that. Look through job descriptions that you are wanting to apply for and look for how you can incorporate keywords from there into your resume. Also don't forget to write a targeted cover letter. If it feels like a template it will be ignored for the most part but if it feels personalized to the company then the hiring manager will pick up on that. Don't forget to do some research on the companies you're applying for! That could give you the edge to get in the door.

rubberToe

I would suggest removing the career objective as it really does nothing but take up space.

In education list the community college you are attending first [as it is most recent], then the technical school but remove the high school listing as it is presumed you have completed high school if attending a community college.

Qualifications - broad

Skills - specific

Remove the redundancies from qualifications and skills, your certification / training is not a skill so remove them and just leave them in qualifications.

It's getting better, it took several revisions to shape mine up.

Remember it is important to only include the most pertinent and relevant information. I know it is hard when being entry level but hey that is where you have to dig deep and get creative.

Include other work experience no matter what it is. Then in the interview talk about skills obtained that would relate to the position applied for such as organizational skills

kripsak

This line confuses me:

"Received two years training in Microsoft Certified Technology Specialist (MCTS), CompTIA A+ and Network+."



Did you get those certs or was it classes that trained you on those certs?

MCPWannabe

This resume completes a number of common mistakes. For a beginner, it's essential that you use a project/Skills based resume for experience.

A good guideline to doing that can be found here:

http://www.balancingprofessionals.com/pdfs/SampleSkillBasedResume.pdf

I've seen better but this is definitely a huge upgrade over what you have now. One last thing, edit your categories also to where you include a certifications section at the very top. Here is another resume:

http://www.principaltechnologies.com/asampleresumes

Now, for the second resume, ignore the recruiting company. But look at how certifications are listed first. I did this and had a lot of success. I made my resume a combination of the two that you see and it got me a lot of looks.

wat08

LarryDaMan wrote:

How would my GPA (it was good) really be relevant?

Because if you've had any experience dealing with HR reps you'd know that they put value in that sort of thing. Lets not forget the psychological aspect of the situation either: subconsciously a high GPA can play a role in the decision-making process. Keep the GPA on the resume.

pLuhhmm

Thanks, Ill take all of this into consideration and post back an updated one.

Mishra

Gundamtdk wrote:

Change the chronological order of your education starting from newest to the oldest.

When I first read the resume I thought you only had high school education.

Agreed. Do this. Your 2nd resume you posted didn't do this.

learningtofly22

+10 to putting the college experience first, down to high school last.

I'm all for GPAs, especially in your case being entry level. Although your knowledge of the War of 1812 has nothing to do with your skills as a PC/IT tech, it DOES show dedication to learning and your ability to pick up new things effectively. Some employers will care about your GPA, some won't, but think about it this way: if your GPA is good and you post it, could it possibly hurt you? The answer is no.

Here's mine for an example, I recently landed a pretty good job with it. Formatting is nice, just cut and pasted so it's a bit skewed here:

Objective: To serve the Orlan platform as an Electronics Technician; striving for zero downtime and pristine maintenance on its electronic systems. This will be accomplished through proven technical expertise (both electronic and physical/dimensional calibration), the ability to quickly learn new systems, procurement/inventory management for the maintenance of critical spare parts, and a preventive maintenance work ethic.


Summary of Qualifications
• Telecommunications Analyst - has taken on the extra roles of procurement and IT project management in the first 6 months with Parker to ensure successful operations.
• Experience soldering circuit boards, electrical plugs, and training in the termination of fiber optic cabling/splicing/troubleshooting.
• United States Navy veteran: 5 years as an Electronics (Telecommunications) Technician and 3 years as Calibration (Instrumentation) Instructor.
• Achieved Master Training Specialist designation in the US Navy.
• Widely recognized as a superior technician, instructor, and team player. Evaluations and awards available upon request.
• Ability to seamlessly transition job fields, sustaining high standards while moving from Electronics Technician to Calibration Instructor, back to Electronics Technician.
• Extensive repair and maintenance experience of military satellite, data link, and cryptology communications equipment in high-stress environments.
• Associate of Arts Degree(BS in Business Administration will be complete in Fall 200
Professional Experience
Parker Drilling Company IT Department
Telecommunications Analyst II 1110 Unifab Road
November 2007 to present New Iberia, LA 70560
Achievements
• Made numerous deployments to rigs in Gulf of Mexico, and 2 deployments to Mexico to repair and maintain voice and data communications on rigs. Most rigs with communications loss were brought back up within hours of arriving onsite.
• Earned 3 industry-standard technical certifications while attending college online full-time and taking on additional responsibilities of procurement and IT project management. GPA of 4.0 for 2008.
• Participated in ENL/Parker’s Rig 262 move IT infrastructure project. Successfully quoted, created POs, ordered, tracked, and delivered over $300k of fiber optics/networking equipment to Sakhalin for the rig’s new home in Odoptu. Project is on-time and under-budget.
• Took responsibility over all equipment procurement for VSAT division after identifying inadequate supply chain procedures in place; all equipment ordered has arrived on time and on budget ever since.

Responsibilities
• Maintain voice and data communications on 51 Parker rigs and 4 earth stations worldwide.
• Deploy to rigs on regular basis to repair/maintain VSAT satellite communications equipment; perform maintenance on rig computers while onsite.
• Get quotes, order equipment, and ensure timely delivery of all VSAT equipment to rigs worldwide as it is needed.
• Ensure project requirements are met, on time and on budget.
• Establish relationships with new equipment vendors and maintain relations with existing vendors.
• New Iberia office rep for all cell phones, blackberries, and pagers.


United States Navy Center for Naval Aviation Technical Training Unit
Calibration Instructor Keesler Air Force Base
2004 – 2007 Biloxi, MS


Achievements

• Sought extra responsibility out of career field, becoming the only one of over 50 instructors to be qualified to teach in 2 schools.
• Earned award of Junior Sailor of the Quarter for 2 consecutive quarters.
• Received highest promotion recommendation possible for 2006 annual performance evaluation.
• Several off duty hours were spent volunteering in the community, including recognition by IRS for participation in the Income Tax Assistance program.
• Earned Master Training Specialist designation.
Responsibilities

• Instructor in 5 blocks of instruction across 2 schools. Subjects taught include military-grade calibration and repair of Gas Detectors, Flow meters, Torque transducers, Panel meters (volt, amp, and frequency), and Pressure gauges.
• Maintained inventory for classroom and updated instructor guides, training manuals, PowerPoint presentations.
• Trained classes of up to 24 students.
• Used PowerPoint, smart board, lecture, and hands on demonstrations for delivery of instruction.
• Managed, scheduled, and tasked 20-25 students for dormitory duty every 8 days.



United States Navy
Naval Training Center Great Lakes, Dam Neck, San Diego
1999-2001
USS Hue City(CG-66)
Mayport, FL
2001-2004
Electronics Technician
Achievements
• Received highest promotion recommendation possible for 2003 annual performance evaluation.
• Graduated Tech Core (Basic Electronics) with a 98 average, to finish 2nd of 78 fellow students.
• Assigned as a peer tutor while a student myself, held OJT for communications equipment operators while onboard my ship.
• Identified and repaired several electronic communications failures while operating both in port and in high stress environments, such as the Persian Gulf, saving money and increasing mission readiness. Navy Achievement Medal was awarded.
• Deployed for 6.5 months supporting Operation Enduring Freedom in 2001, successfully maintaining maximum communications connectivity despite several severe failures. Admiral’s Letter of Commendation was awarded.
• Attained a ship’s security qualification usually reserved for service members of a much higher rank.
Responsibilities
• Configure and manage critical voice and data communications networks for customers (Admirals, Captains, and enlisted operators).
• Accountable for the equipment of 3 technicians due to more electronic schooling than peers.
• Maintenance, operation, and repair of the Navy’s Extremely High Frequency (EHF) Satellite Communications Terminal, Joint Tactical Information and Distribution System (JTIDS), and the Secure Audio Switching System(SAS).
• Repair parts Petty Officer – responsible for ordering all communications repair parts onboard USS Hue City.






Education/Certifications
Capella University, Minneapolis, MN
Currently a Senior in Business Administration, Bachelor of Science
Graduation 2009

Florida Community College At Jacksonville, Jacksonville, Florida
Associate of Arts
2006

FOA Certified Fiber Optic Technician
Comptia A+
Comptia Network+

United States Navy
Over 2 years of military electronics, calibration, and instructor schools recognized by the American Council on Education. A 7-page military transcript is available upon request.
References
References are available upon request.