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Resume troubles!
Z3-Masterd
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Fellow technophiles:
I'm having a hard time with staffing agencies. I've spoken to the third one this week that told me to revise me resume ("Make it more apparent that you worked with end-users," they said). I've often trolled these forums and have incorporated a lot of resume advice that others have been offered. I thought now would be a good time to put my own on the chopping block and see what constructive criticism I can get. I've put in for around twenty desktop and network positions during the past month, but I've only got one interview out of it all. At this point, I'm not sure if it's a lack of experience, education, or a the presentation of myself holding me back.
Any feedback is greatly appreciated.
I'm having a hard time with staffing agencies. I've spoken to the third one this week that told me to revise me resume ("Make it more apparent that you worked with end-users," they said). I've often trolled these forums and have incorporated a lot of resume advice that others have been offered. I thought now would be a good time to put my own on the chopping block and see what constructive criticism I can get. I've put in for around twenty desktop and network positions during the past month, but I've only got one interview out of it all. At this point, I'm not sure if it's a lack of experience, education, or a the presentation of myself holding me back.
Any feedback is greatly appreciated.
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Optionsptilsen Member Posts: 2,835 ■■■■■■■■■■Too long, too much text, and your writing style is the antithesis of what a resume should be. You have extended, personalized descriptions of what you did. This isn't your memoirs. It isn't even a cover letter. It's a snapshot of your career. Each job description should be a collection of fragments (not sentences) briefly describing noteworthy accomplishment, projects, and duties. There should be no parentheticals, no pronouns, no asides, no random background details. The person who advised that you "make it more apparent that you worked with end-users" didn't read more than maybe 2-3% of your resume (since it's almost entirely user support), and most recruiters and hiring managers won't when it's this long.
There's a good amount of redundant or irrelevant data. "At CFGroup" is redundant, for example. This entire paragraph is totally irrelevant: [/quote]I worked at a local community college as a student tutor for almost two full years (while I attended school there
myself). Sometimes students would show up as walk-ins to have a paper proofread or a math problem doublechecked.
Many of my students, however, were routine and[/quote]
As an example of style deficiencies, take this paragraph:After working with the data migration nightshift team, the Unisys project lead asked me to serve as
helpdesk support during the day shift. In doing so, I was given a greater scope of responsibility and, in turn,
answered directly on a day-to-day basis to the overall project manager.Promoted to helpdesk support and given project reporting responsibilities after proven excellence
On that specific experience item, though, that is a lot of text. Three months of work just doesn't justify six bullet points and what looks to be 10-12 sentences. I have less for a job I worked from 2006 to 2008. I probably wouldn't list small project contract jobs that overlapped my day job, either.
Your technical skills section should possibly be removed entirely. Relevant skills should be displayed in your experience, "professional profile," and certifications (to an extent). If you do keep it, you really need to more carefully consider what you list. I mean, copper cabling and Linksys WAPs?
Your content overall is not bad, per se. I don't see many technical mistakes, which is a nice change of pace, but there's a lot of work to do here. When all is said and done, there are still some questions you'll need to be prepared for. you don't need to answer them here, you just need to be prepared for them.
I see you have job gaps from April to September 2007, December 2005 to March 2006, and August 2011 to August 2012. What caused these gaps?
Why haven't you held an IT position since 2011?
Why didn't you do technical work from 2007 to 2009?
Why did you major in history and minor in finance after starting a career in IT?
How does your work as a graduate assistant relate to this position?
Why is there an overlap between your IBM and Unisys entries?
Why did you leave CFGroup? -
OptionsDCD Member Posts: 473 ■■■■□□□□□□I agree with ptilsen said. Like this line itsounds strange "I have served in behind-the-scenes positions and on the frontlinesof the helpdesk" You need to re-word it and give a better detail of what you did.
I would move your certifications above technical skills and reverse the orderof the certifications.
MicrosoftCertified Systems Administrator, Server 2003 (MCSA)
MicrosoftCertified Professional, Windows XP (MCP)
Cisco Certified Network Associate (CCNA)
CompTIA A+
CompTIA Network+,
RBT Copper-Based Cabling
If you keep the Technical Skill part put the software section first if you are looking for a desktop position. Also remove the Network router and switches from the Network section you have LAN, WAN and WI-FI setup below it which says the same thing then over in hardware section you have Cisco switches and routers.
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OptionsNetworkVeteran Member Posts: 2,338 ■■■■■■■■□□I'm going to agree that my initial impression is too much text.Resume Professional Profile wrote:Cisco, CompTIA, and Microsoft certified with more than four years combined
experience in information technology. Multi-faceted technical skills and experience, including router and switch
configuration, hardware setup and maintenance, Windows desktop support (remote and on-site), and network
cabling maintenance, deployment, and termination. I have served in behind-the-scenes positions and on the
frontlines of the helpdesk, dealing directly with end users, supervisors, and project managers. A polite, amenable
personality and a love for tinkering and problem solving enable me to approach a variety of roles with the
necessary professional attitude and commitment to doing the job well."Resume Technical Skills wrote:TECHNICAL SKILLSResume Education wrote:EducationResume Experience wrote:"As a graduate assistant, my function was to be the middleman between the students and the professor. More often than not, students came directly to me with questions and in search of help relating to the course."